In reply to Toccata:
We rarely understand anything differently when we read a poem,especially as we get older.
Maybe it reawakens something in us or reminds us of different worlds or interpretations.
I won't be working the poem any further. As you change bits here and there the emotional power is often lost.
Stink is stink and fetid is fetid.Neither will be edited out.They are not the same thing.Sometimes I use a sledgehammer and sometimes a feather.
No poem is a cure all for everyone.One person hates what another loves.
A general rule for me is,will the reader read the poem through a second time?
As long as an image or idea lodges in the reader's mind,the poem has ''worked''.A poem with every line 'perfect' is rare indeed,and who is to judge?
Ta for the feedback.It does help to know what people think.The poem wanders deliberately.The issue of drug use is complex,with pros and cons.
The final image is intended to leave the reader to join the dots.If they can't,so be it.Clarity is not everything in poetry.Some of my poetry is brutally frank,and some audiences find THAT hard to deal with,while others applaud.
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