UKC

Can you capture it?
Your essence of existence?
It helps winter pass.

In reply to JJL:

I have two heartbeats
A flutter like a wren's wing
Winter defeated.

In reply to JJL:

Expectations build
Only then to be destroyed
Wine helps to forget

or perhaps...

Time passes always
Full of experiences
Each one adds richness

hmmmm....

Work, love, family
Adventures on mountain cliffs
Each one has its place

this is all getting a bit heavy...

trad or sport is best
arguments on UKC
what a waste of life

In reply to JJL:

The small pond expands
with autumn's tepid rainfall
In ice nothing thrives.

Mine (I):

Mid-age; a pivot
Aches for the body's spring, but
Deeper resonance

Mine (II):

A baby full grown;
Reflection of my own voice
Startles like blackbirds

In reply to AlisonSmiles:

Are you a frog?

In reply to Jon Stewart:

You took your "this is all too heaavy" idea and ran with it...

In reply to Alyson:

That's lovely.

In reply to JJL:

My life rolls onwards
But sometimes makes no sense
Fish

In reply to Clauso:

You seem not to know
How haiku are contructed
But it matters not

In reply to Jon Stewart:

You criticise an amateur.
Give me yours in Japanese.
Smart arse.

In reply to Clauso:

Can't speak Japanese
But that's of no consequence
Now google haiku

In reply to JJL:

Brain injuries last
Ne'er recovering fully
So wear a helmet

In reply to Jon Stewart:

I Googled haiku
translated from Japanese
bad grammar has it

... Prefer Pam Ayres, personally.

In reply to Clauso:

That is more like it
Our poetic spat was fun
Now I'm off to bed

In reply to JJL:

My time is not mine
University eats it
Roll on autumn!

In reply to Alyson:

That is indeed lovely

In reply to kathrync:

No it isn't - she's bloody tachycardic!

In reply to Submit to Gravity:

Or possibly pregnant?

In reply to kathrync:

Damn, I missed a syllable!

My time is not mine
University eats it
Roll on September!

That's better

In reply to JJL:

When did time escape?
Chasing always after hope.
Clouds race by so fast.

In reply to kathrync:

That's what I thought

In reply to JJL:

I enjoy Findus
Now my life is galloping
And I nibble grass.

In reply to JJL:

I've got the shits
My tummy hurts
Time to return to bed

In reply to kathrync:

This one! But poetry should be open to interpretation so I'm also happy to be thought of as a time lord.

In reply to JJL:

Whole life in Haiku?
As a candle to the sun
Richness deserves more

In reply to john arran:

Nicely done.

In reply to JJL:

Subaru, Honda,
Suzuki, Mitsubishi;
Octavia mine.

In reply to JJL:

I'm playing a game
the rules I dont understand
at least it is fun

In reply to JJL:

Saucer shows tea leaves:
Starlings in a winter sky,
Twilight decisions.

In reply to JJL:


fast ride down the moor
last jump landed, kinda, f*ck
ing thumb f*cking f*cked

We try to escape
From the zeal of gravity
But Earth remains home

In reply to JJL:
Since September's sunshine
no outdoor climbing achieved
indoors only. Groaning*




*not like that, smut-meisters

In reply to JJL:

Great thread passes time,
Much better than usual.
A refreshing change.

In reply to JJL:

Quiet ledge contemplation
The peace breaks
Boulderers have 'sent'

In reply to Pinged:

From tha wikkeepee:

"The essence of haiku is "cutting" (kiru).This is often represented by the juxtaposition of two images or ideas and a kireji ("cutting word") between them, a kind of verbal punctuation mark which signals the moment of separation and colours the manner in which the juxtaposed elements are related.

Traditional haiku consist of 17 "on" (also known as morae [which we may as well equate to syllables), in three phrases of 5, 7 and 5 on respectively. Any one of the three phrases may end with the kireji."

so you can see that this:

fast ride down the moor
last jump landed, kinda, f*ck
ing thumb f*cking f*cked


follows the 5,7,5 rule, the justaposition being riding and injury; first f*ck being the kirenji...

Bradford Royal Infirmary on a Sunday whilst a rich source of images is harder to work into a haiku.

In reply to johnjohn:

ooohh..ok...mine was bloody miles off then!

Try again

My legde cold but quiet
contemplation and peace, mine
then someone 'sends'...whooop

In reply to Pero:

Nice.

In reply to JJL: Am I alone in thinking Haiku is a little bit shit?

In reply to Submit to Gravity:

Possibly.

In reply to JJL:

Thank you for this game
although not so important
a smile came to me

I was young and strong
now I am older and long
but I enjoy still

In reply to Submit to Gravity:

Am i al-one?
In thinking Haiku is [sic]
A little bit shit


...works better in formal terms. The I contmplating being alone, and contemplating Haiku is the first strand, the mundane 'bit shit' the second, with my supplied 'sic' to denote incorrect singular in the original being the karenji.

Though perhaps loses the naive vibrancy of your original.

In reply to JJL:
We do what we can
running fast as the light goes
winter has it's charms

In reply to johnjohn: Excellent!

In reply to JJL:

Snowdrop, snowdrop spear
Winters heart. Illuminate
The path to springtime

Mine (III):

Chemotherapy
Extraordinarily
Indiscriminate