In reply to GrendeI:
> (In reply to ciaran1999)
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> ... not some beer gut ridden divorcee living in the blogosphere.
Excellent!
Ciaran, good on your for having a go and asking for feedback on here. I wish I'd seen the allegedly abysmal original now! I like your blue background and the font is OK.
OK? Yeh, I guess that's it. It just seems a bit bog-standard boring - basic text and a few standard, non-use pics. As others have said, there are plenty of review sites around now and, while you put up whatever you want for your own enjoyment, if you actually want a large number of others out there in the internets to like it and value it then you need to add a bit more originality and interest. Your dad might have used the word 'pizazz'.
Not useless fancy stuff to look nice, but original and active stuff to show you've used it and what it was like and how it is in real life - different pics, links to other things, some video (no beer guts).
Break up the blocks of text more, don't make us read A WHOLE PARAGRAPH OF MULTIPLE SENTENCES IN ONE GO!
We just can't do that these days. It's a visual medium, don't try and makes us think too much.